Monday 5 September 2011

A Great One Liner...(write on wednesdays)

This week's write on wednesdays prompt was that of the 'great one liner', which I have to say struck me as a hell of a challenge, but I've given it a go...(as I am such a rambler I apologise for there being 2 sentences rather than just the one!) Feel free to leave any comments ...
 
 
It only took one fleeting moment, one meaningful glance, one heart-faltering look...but she knew their relationship would survive...She smiled, feeling strong, and waved him goodbye.
 
 
There's one person that will know how this feels. I actually really enjoyed this.
 
Zx

18 comments:

  1. I think you followed the prompt pretty well Z, it tells a real story.

    I found this really hard too and ended up with a two liner, a stolen one liner AND a borrowed one. (and you think you ramble :)

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  2. Your words here really described that feeling. Nice work!

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  3. You did a great job! The flow of the sentences are fantastic!!

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  4. You really generated a story in one line. Great stuff. Images and feelings included. :) Zanni

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  5. But this is very nice! Two sentences that make a story already. Lovely!

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  6. Lovely! I like it with just the first sentence, too. I mean, it totally works as either a one-liner or two-liner. :)

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  7. So much said in such a small amount of words - great job! You really nailed the prompt, and it was a difficult one!

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  8. This is great - it's a pivotal moment which speak about a trouble past and a promising future! Well done!

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  9. You've done a great job here, it really tells a beautiful story. I think you've followed the prompt perfectly.

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  10. Nice work. There is a story here, and I look forward to reading more.

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  11. Well done. There is much emotion breaking through in these two sentences.

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  12. Great job Z and yes, I can relate to it well. It's a wonderful feeling that you've captured really well.

    Anne xx

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  13. You have captured so much with so little! well done. Thanks xx Meg

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  14. Oh I'm loving this...want to read more!

    Well done.

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  15. Wasn't it tough? An excellent lesson in writing though, I think. I like her faith in their relationship, I'd like to know where this starts and begins! Good on you for rising to the challenge

    Gill x

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  16. Good stuff! The repetition of the word 'one' conjured images of a very powerful love indeed.

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  17. I'm confused by the 'but'. Should it be 'and'?
    I like the repetition of 'one' too, it creates a great rhythm. Nice effort. There's a story in there.

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  18. ...and what happens next? Would love to know! Great work :-)

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