This week's write on wednesdays prompt was that of the 'great one liner', which I have to say struck me as a hell of a challenge, but I've given it a go...(as I am such a rambler I apologise for there being 2 sentences rather than just the one!) Feel free to leave any comments ...
It only took one fleeting moment, one meaningful glance, one heart-faltering look...but she knew their relationship would survive...She smiled, feeling strong, and waved him goodbye.
There's one person that will know how this feels. I actually really enjoyed this.
Zx
I think you followed the prompt pretty well Z, it tells a real story.
ReplyDeleteI found this really hard too and ended up with a two liner, a stolen one liner AND a borrowed one. (and you think you ramble :)
Your words here really described that feeling. Nice work!
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job! The flow of the sentences are fantastic!!
ReplyDeleteYou really generated a story in one line. Great stuff. Images and feelings included. :) Zanni
ReplyDeleteBut this is very nice! Two sentences that make a story already. Lovely!
ReplyDeleteLovely! I like it with just the first sentence, too. I mean, it totally works as either a one-liner or two-liner. :)
ReplyDeleteSo much said in such a small amount of words - great job! You really nailed the prompt, and it was a difficult one!
ReplyDeleteThis is great - it's a pivotal moment which speak about a trouble past and a promising future! Well done!
ReplyDeleteYou've done a great job here, it really tells a beautiful story. I think you've followed the prompt perfectly.
ReplyDeleteNice work. There is a story here, and I look forward to reading more.
ReplyDeleteWell done. There is much emotion breaking through in these two sentences.
ReplyDeleteGreat job Z and yes, I can relate to it well. It's a wonderful feeling that you've captured really well.
ReplyDeleteAnne xx
You have captured so much with so little! well done. Thanks xx Meg
ReplyDeleteOh I'm loving this...want to read more!
ReplyDeleteWell done.
Wasn't it tough? An excellent lesson in writing though, I think. I like her faith in their relationship, I'd like to know where this starts and begins! Good on you for rising to the challenge
ReplyDeleteGill x
Good stuff! The repetition of the word 'one' conjured images of a very powerful love indeed.
ReplyDeleteI'm confused by the 'but'. Should it be 'and'?
ReplyDeleteI like the repetition of 'one' too, it creates a great rhythm. Nice effort. There's a story in there.
...and what happens next? Would love to know! Great work :-)
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